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on my sweet sixteenth
he showed up at my door
with bandaged hands
and a bouquet of roses.
my daddy was rich
and he was broke,
so he sang a stupid love song
about how our roses don't have thorns.
i fall halfway into love,
but then i wonder,
what if i am a thorn?

on my seventeenth birthday
he rang my doorbell,
holding a set of plastic china,
his buttons in the wrong holes
and smelling of cheap perfume.
my daddy wasn't rich
and he wasn't broke,
but he still sang a stupid love song
about how our love will never shatter.
i'm stuck in love,
but then i wonder,
when will the china break?

on my eighteenth birthday,
he showed up at my funeral,
his buttons in the wrong holes
and smelling of cheap perfume.
my daddy was broken
and he was broke again.
he sang a song
about how much he would miss me.
i laugh in death,
and say,
liar.
This is my contest entry for :icontubefed:. Critique maybe?
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iRy19 Dec 17, 2013  Student Writer
Q-Q That made my heart lurch, the threat of tears danced near my lower lashes. A reaction to such a piece <3 It's because of things like this why I love art, the way it can affect someone <3 Thank you
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funkylime123 Dec 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much!
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SolidMars Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
hi there,
your lovely work  has been featured here: Weekly Feature
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funkylime123 Oct 21, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much!
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SolidMars Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :huggle:
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Meguru7an Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Loved it. Beautifully written.
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funkylime123 Oct 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! I really appreciate it. :)
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Meguru7an Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem :)
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FierySpark Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is great!! I completely agree with ~SleepingInTheShadows :D
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funkylime123 Oct 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so so much, :)
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